Your app overall is fine, but your AU section and a few lines around your other sections are giving us cause for concern. Primarily, we're worried that you don't seem to fully understand the premise of the game.
Aungier is a memory loss AU game- this means that characters "arrive" at the house believing that they are someone else entirely from the universe the game is set in, only to have their true canon memories re-emerge while they're active. Though we aren't at all against players mapping their characters' AU history on their canon history, you've essentially just rehashed the plot of his canon as though it were set in the Aungier universe, even aging Cain up to match the year; aside from his relocation to Aungier House, Cain's AU history is identical to his canon history. This somewhat defeats the point of the game- characters realising that the life they're living is a lie and struggling to remember who they are so they can return home to their own canon universe.
As such, we're going to have to request revisions to his AU to better reflect the game's premise. There's absolutely no reason why you can't model his AU closely on his canon history, just so long as he's obviously a different person from the Aungier universe in it! If you need any help working out how to make his AU work, please do ask. Alternately, if this means that the game isn't quite what you thought you'd be apping into, we're very sorry for the confusion.
REVISION REQUEST
Aungier is a memory loss AU game- this means that characters "arrive" at the house believing that they are someone else entirely from the universe the game is set in, only to have their true canon memories re-emerge while they're active. Though we aren't at all against players mapping their characters' AU history on their canon history, you've essentially just rehashed the plot of his canon as though it were set in the Aungier universe, even aging Cain up to match the year; aside from his relocation to Aungier House, Cain's AU history is identical to his canon history. This somewhat defeats the point of the game- characters realising that the life they're living is a lie and struggling to remember who they are so they can return home to their own canon universe.
As such, we're going to have to request revisions to his AU to better reflect the game's premise. There's absolutely no reason why you can't model his AU closely on his canon history, just so long as he's obviously a different person from the Aungier universe in it! If you need any help working out how to make his AU work, please do ask. Alternately, if this means that the game isn't quite what you thought you'd be apping into, we're very sorry for the confusion.